Friday, February 24, 2012

A good paragraph by Büşra Albayrak (Looking forward to your comments)

   Instructive Cartoons for Children                    So far, technology has a very crucial place for people and it is being improved day by day for many different purposes. As it is known, television is one of the most known devices of this technology. Lots of people, especially children, spend at least an hour everyday to watch something on TV. Children are watching many cartoons without being aware of its effects. Although some of these cartoons can affect children negatively, there are also really beneficial ones to teach them being a good child. Caillou who both teaches children how to improve their skills and makes the children laugh from time to time is one of these beneficial cartoons. This cartoon’s purpose is to mention children that how they should react when they face with different situations or how to do their duties on their own without asking for help as much as possible. Besides, this cartoon is beneficial for children in relation to being helpful. For instance, my little sister, Beyza, is a fan of Caillou and she always wants to help my mother at house works. And of course this situation makes both Beyza and my mother happy. Consequently, if there will be more cartoons like Caillou and children are eager to watch them, it can be advantageous for the children in relation to developing their abilities. And I can easily say that it really works.                       

11 comments:

  1. congrats to büşra. ı really liked it.

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  2. What did you like most Özlem? Try to be specific..

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  4. I also wrote Caillou in my essay. I think Caillou is one of the most beneficial cartoon in the world :) and I really liked your essay büşracım :)

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  5. Congratulations.It is not written with basic sentences.Although it is complicated you could tell it understandable.

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  6. the thing ı liked most is the unity of it.

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  7. After she explained the effects of cartoons, she gave a specific example from her life. I think these kind of examples, which are about authors' experiences, make the paragraph more attractive..

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  8. I really enjoyed while I was reading it. It was so fluent and easy to understand Büşracım congrats!

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  9. Thank you all girls, I am really happy about hearing that comments from you..

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